Thursday, September 03, 2009


He puts the quarters in the washer and pushes in the slide—
click click click rrrrasp rattle
He selects the temperature and cycle and presses the on-button
beep beep-beep beep
The washer fills
and churns
glug glug glug glug glug
and drains
and spins

the unbalance light went on.
He opens the lid
and starts to rearrange the load
of fifty-seven unmatched socks and a duvet.
It just doesn't pay to be eccentric.

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Anonymous said...

from Therese B. at RWP -- Delightful! Lots of onomatopoeia which you make even more expressive by varying fonts -- styles, sizes, italics, etc. Snappy ending, with double meaning of "it doesn't pay."

Anonymous said...

Clever. And it sounds right, too.

Nano Boye Nagle - Ziji Salaam said...

Ya Fattah!
Would love to hear this spoken with drums.

Carmi said...

Reminds me of my recent laundromat experience. As always, you've found the right words!

Michelle Johnson said...

this is great with all its sounds. i haven't been to a laundromat in years but still remember how it was. have a great day.

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Anonymous said...

i also like the font changes as a method of conveying the different sounds. it makes a great contribution!

Mark said...

"of fifty-seven unmatched socks and a duvet.
It just doesn't pay to be eccentric."

I love this conclusion. I know this guy well. See him in the mirror...

Wonderfully done.