tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post3239851975170682663..comments2024-02-23T02:11:35.147-08:00Comments on Knocking From Inside: Lot's WifeTiel Aisha Ansarihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03994169558252043919noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-59459550546116113992008-06-24T09:28:00.000-07:002008-06-24T09:28:00.000-07:00Tiel -What a wonderful transformation of your piec...Tiel -<BR/><BR/>What a wonderful transformation of your piece "Lot's Wife". The heightened clarity and impact of the revision was well worth the effort in re-birthing it...<BR/><BR/>FROM: "Salt girl, you weep with every drop of rain<BR/>your face grows blurred, your hands dissolve and melt.<BR/>Salt-water tears will wash away your pain."<BR/><BR/>TO: "She weeps salt tears with every drop of rain;<BR/>her hands are blurred and softened by the water,<BR/>but peace will come in time to Sodom's daughter,<BR/>a statue formed of slow-dissolving pain."<BR/><BR/>Superb revision! I am drawn especially to the line -- "...a statue formed of slow-dissolving pain." Well done, and thank you for sharing this. ;)<BR/><BR/>...robRob Kistnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11365982588165098990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-27174995617415836372008-06-23T09:09:00.000-07:002008-06-23T09:09:00.000-07:00Lovely, particularly the last few lines linking ra...Lovely, particularly the last few lines linking rain/tears/dissolving...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-78220280364622163462007-10-16T21:07:00.000-07:002007-10-16T21:07:00.000-07:00wow. so very lovely. like wendy, i love this line:...wow. so very lovely. like wendy, i love this line: Salt-water tears will wash away your pain. perfect for the prompt!Odessahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17397968854709642789noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-91728772351408183412007-10-13T11:36:00.000-07:002007-10-13T11:36:00.000-07:00Really beautiful! I love how you described why she...Really beautiful! I love how you described why she turned and stayed, instead of going into exile -- how "she felt/ she couldn't bear to live so far from home." This brought tears to my eyes. And thank you for telling me about this lovely poetry site!Clarehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11746014771712020963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-27334666038061277042007-10-12T12:48:00.000-07:002007-10-12T12:48:00.000-07:00so very lovely ...so very lovely ...daisieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06471659782256693603noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-10517045559451919462007-10-12T08:11:00.000-07:002007-10-12T08:11:00.000-07:00I like your subtle rhymes and your reimagining of ...I like your subtle rhymes and your reimagining of this story, which has often fascinated me too.Crafty Green Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02486633917197181851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-42274269537377117462007-10-11T18:26:00.000-07:002007-10-11T18:26:00.000-07:00I love the repetition of "salt girl." Your tellin...I love the repetition of "salt girl." Your telling of this biblical tale is great. It says more than the original, so much so that I need to go back and read it again. Thanks.jillypoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14951224240914478371noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-54129660117223017732007-10-11T11:50:00.000-07:002007-10-11T11:50:00.000-07:00"The preachersclaim curiosity's the fatal faulttha..."The preachers<BR/>claim curiosity's the fatal fault<BR/>that made her stop, that made her look behind<BR/>and turned her to a statue made of salt."<BR/><BR/>Sigh! This resonates with females..Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-4151480950407418912007-10-11T11:23:00.000-07:002007-10-11T11:23:00.000-07:00It's such a beautiful and poetic story, a tale tha...It's such a beautiful and poetic story, a tale that (I think) often resonates with women. Sometimes, the consequences of <I>not</I> letting go are much more damaging. <BR/><BR/>I love what you have done with this story. It's wonderful.Holly Machttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03610077263690125535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-38225680043663900842007-10-11T11:08:00.000-07:002007-10-11T11:08:00.000-07:00I always felt sorry for Lot's wife. Your poem is n...I always felt sorry for Lot's wife. Your poem is nice - well crafted.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-44716492800247687972007-10-11T10:41:00.000-07:002007-10-11T10:41:00.000-07:00Wonderful new words on the old time tale. This poe...Wonderful new words on the old time tale. This poem is full of originality and thoughtful processing. Love it!Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-10903727784457550582007-10-11T09:20:00.000-07:002007-10-11T09:20:00.000-07:00I like that in losing face..she loses her pain.I like that in losing face..she loses her pain.wendyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14586814769281622578noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-49950693600260781752007-10-11T07:05:00.000-07:002007-10-11T07:05:00.000-07:00Truly lovely -- I like the details in which you br...Truly lovely -- I like the details in which you bring the salt to a logical conclusion -- salt tears, the (not) growing of flowers. Well done!Jessicahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09701158085304753313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-47485976029567974392007-10-11T06:12:00.000-07:002007-10-11T06:12:00.000-07:00Very, very well done. Excellent use of form.Very, very well done. Excellent use of form.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-62553249593846700942007-10-11T05:15:00.000-07:002007-10-11T05:15:00.000-07:00i just knew it!!!! this was so right on for the pr...i just knew it!!!! this was so right on for the prompt!!!! so good i wish i had written it myself!!!!!!paisleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-35321269785461867682007-10-11T04:37:00.000-07:002007-10-11T04:37:00.000-07:002nd reading, and still lovely. The rhyming rocks.2nd reading, and still lovely. The rhyming rocks.Rethabilehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03523368313680103826noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-77422038005098867052007-10-08T12:34:00.000-07:002007-10-08T12:34:00.000-07:00A really beautiful poem. If you'd like to see ano...A really beautiful poem. If you'd like to see another artist's rendering of the Lot story, go here:<BR/><BR/>http://rwellsrwells.blogspot.com/2006_12_01_archive.html<BR/><BR/>more will be revealed...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-78276908984301443062007-10-08T02:07:00.000-07:002007-10-08T02:07:00.000-07:00This comment has been removed by a blog administrator.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-13500539000417217122007-10-07T16:23:00.000-07:002007-10-07T16:23:00.000-07:00Touching and beautiful, and very understanding to ...Touching and beautiful, and very understanding to the unsung wife of Lot. Looking at the fire of God destroying Sodom is like looking at the face of the Medusa. We are turned into stone and salt by the horror and the power of it. But your poetic explanation is more satisfying by far .<BR/><BR/>Ya Haqq!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-62820696483390730712007-10-07T14:58:00.000-07:002007-10-07T14:58:00.000-07:00This story of Lot's wife has always interested me....This story of Lot's wife has always interested me. Surely God knew already that she would turn back. But this is sweet poem, catching the implied cruelty of turning her to salt, dried tears.<BR/>The rhythm and structure are a little prosaic, but the idea is poetic.Paul Squireshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01782520339054456021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-704006669802633272007-10-07T12:59:00.000-07:002007-10-07T12:59:00.000-07:00Yes, lovely. Very.Yes, lovely. Very.Rethabilehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03523368313680103826noreply@blogger.com