tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post9066432813937035185..comments2024-02-23T02:11:35.147-08:00Comments on Knocking From Inside: Eucalyptus DaphneTiel Aisha Ansarihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03994169558252043919noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-77463877426181637042009-12-11T07:28:55.762-08:002009-12-11T07:28:55.762-08:00I was so caught up in the images that I missed the...I was so caught up in the images that I missed the form altogether. The rhymes work so naturally that they only add music. I love the way the opening works.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-6606254809165018802009-12-11T04:51:52.247-08:002009-12-11T04:51:52.247-08:00I would have let him catch me, but
I saw this tree...I would have let him catch me, but<br />I saw this tree.<br /><br />Your entry here sets such a tone! Then enters to a wildness of heart and raw sight, and all beautifully embraced. As any lover could wish to be, faithfully.<br />Thank you for this poem very much!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-64503633960867280762009-12-10T18:09:48.998-08:002009-12-10T18:09:48.998-08:00I enjoyed the beautiful story of Daphne and the tr...I enjoyed the beautiful story of Daphne and the tree and how they became one. I enjoyed the way you crafted the sonnet format into a richly colored tale. The imagery is striking. thanks for sharing this, Aisha!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03241402645242821612noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-29032315060871783612009-12-10T13:01:49.921-08:002009-12-10T13:01:49.921-08:00This does a great job of reinventing the myth and ...This does a great job of reinventing the myth and plying it towards your own vision of love and nature. I like the sonnet-like shape of the poem and how it creates confines like the two-sided prison of the tree.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-44305383618655701462009-12-10T08:54:44.264-08:002009-12-10T08:54:44.264-08:00from Therese L. Broderick -- As Linda's commen...from Therese L. Broderick -- As Linda's comment noticed: the shortest lines at the beginning of the poem achieve a special effect. They relay to the reader the speaker's sudden struck-by-love, entrancement, with the tree. Those short lines comprise, together, the second line of the sonnet. A skillful modification of the sonnet form. Well-done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-73388790753126320242009-12-10T08:11:41.436-08:002009-12-10T08:11:41.436-08:00Aisha, this is not only a homage to love but to th...Aisha, this is not only a homage to love but to the eucalypt. If they could feel, all 700 species would applaud you for this fine verse.<br />Regards,<br />DHDonald Harbourhttp://woodennickel.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-24126597460205043472008-04-16T21:33:00.000-07:002008-04-16T21:33:00.000-07:00love the rhyming couplet--what a kick!great vivid ...love the rhyming couplet--what a kick!<BR/><BR/>great vivid images throughout, very sensualAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-42930239821602404762008-04-12T12:50:00.000-07:002008-04-12T12:50:00.000-07:00A beauty this one, a wild,sensual myth. Love!A beauty this one, a wild,<BR/>sensual myth. Love!Cynthiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10598169309616545734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-32526367915317513412008-04-11T18:53:00.000-07:002008-04-11T18:53:00.000-07:00well-written, interesting interpretation of Daphne...well-written, interesting interpretation of Daphne turning into a laurel. Very sensuous.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-76028137907236987602008-04-10T13:18:00.000-07:002008-04-10T13:18:00.000-07:00I like those short lines at the beginning. They g...I like those short lines at the beginning. They give it a playful feel sort of like hide and seek. Cool!Linda Jacobshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14459940700516084069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-10223017541835346992008-04-10T09:26:00.000-07:002008-04-10T09:26:00.000-07:00Superb - Vivid imagery!Superb - Vivid imagery!Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-79837643316231146282008-04-10T00:42:00.000-07:002008-04-10T00:42:00.000-07:00All that glistens?...But the attraction is clear t...All that glistens?...But the attraction is clear to seeStan Skihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11963655096635414472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-11768407524737882442008-04-10T00:37:00.000-07:002008-04-10T00:37:00.000-07:00beautiful.....beautiful.....Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-59390434949731978052008-04-10T00:28:00.000-07:002008-04-10T00:28:00.000-07:00very vivid! I like the rainbow run madvery vivid! I like the rainbow run madCrafty Green Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02486633917197181851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12056722.post-6031887385063898062008-04-09T08:00:00.000-07:002008-04-09T08:00:00.000-07:00this is lovely and so fantastical! j'adore!this is lovely and so fantastical! j'adore!Adminhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09031370976246712353noreply@blogger.com