Unforgettable moment: scuba diving with giant mantas.
My facemask tight against my nose, I glide
with bubbles trailing from my regulator.
Leaden weights fit close against my sides,
meridian my personal equator.
I was a private planet, self-contained
my orbit, some subaqueous ellipse
til overhead, a devil shadow planed
and blotted out the sun in brief eclipse.
A giant manta. Wingspan: thirteen feet.
Immense and gentle, close enough to touch.
And I am lost, my orbit incomplete,
my self forgotten, reaching out to clutch
with hands and heart both full of turbulence
its wake, a trail of comet radiance.
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Monday, November 05, 2007
Molokini
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14 comments:
this is an absolutely beautiful description of an unforgettable moment!
I was a private planet self-contained. Wonderfully written.
Yes, the notion of the private planet works very well as a central metaphor to this vivid piece.
that must have been an incredible experience. Bueatifully written as always!
Would have scared the life out of me! Great story.
I like the transition from being self contained to being lost in the wake of something awesome
'meridian my personal equator' I love this line, and the rest as well. Beautiful.
I second Pauline - that movement from within ourselves to in touch with the greater world, that's powerful stuff.
I especially liked
And I am lost, my orbit incomplete,
my self forgotten, reaching out to clutch
with hands and heart both full of turbulence
its wake, a trail of comet radiance.
Wonderful!
I felt like I was there.
Beautiful my friend. You have such a gift of story telling and description
that I envy the glory you see. I too have touched the giant Manta and felt it's gentle wisdom. Well done!!!
love-bd
Thirteen foot wing span....
You had me there. I can think of nothing more unforgettable than that!
What a thrill...
xo
Gillian
A most magical moment! 'Tis indeed unforgettable...
I've never been scuba-diving but you make me feel like I should go.
Stunning. Just gorgeous. You put me there with you.
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