Love letters lie in the rain
photographs drift in the breeze
ink eddies dark down the drain.
Love letters lie. In the rain,
a slow-moving sad southbound train
is leaving the platform where these
love letters lie. In the rain,
photographs drift in the breeze.
Tuesday, January 29, 2008
Southbound Train
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7 comments:
Beautifully done.
So sad and so lovely.
I love the fourth line, when the repeat of line one changes everything. Awesome.
sad and beautiful
I loved your structure. It is very rare to find someone who truly employs the poetic tools at his disposal.
i love ink eddies drift down the drain
oops
ink eddies dark down the drain
which is even better
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