Wednesday, January 16, 2008

Veteran

3 Word Wednesday: Awkward. Kitchen. Obsessed.

obsessed and homeless
standing awkwardly in line
at the soup kitchen

9 comments:

Truefaith1963 said...

Oh thats a good one!
Great use of the words

Unknown said...

INcredible.....from the title to the wonderful application of the words into the 3 short lines. Very moving.

Penelope Anne
http://wannabeawritersomeday.blogspot.com/2008/01/3ww-volume-3.html

Anonymous said...

Wow, this haiku packs a doozy of a punch, and the words couldn't be more perfectly suited. Masterful work!

Tumblewords: said...

Ouch. Provocative 3 lines!

Linda Jacobs said...

The title really make the haiku. Without it the tone would have been much different. Excellent!

Christine Gail said...

powerful image you painted here

very moving

TC said...

This seems like you really bring their feelings alive... I've always wondered if there wasn't some awkwardness and shame, or if it just became second nature.

little wing writer said...

moving in its simplicity of emotions and words....

Norma said...

Really superb.