Sunday, July 20, 2008

Inside Fibonacci

Inner chambers walled with pearl
line the logarithmic swirl
of a nautilus, unfurled
hidden heart of living world.

Fibonacci terms unfolding
like a fertile blossom holding
sprouting seeds, or clay self-molding
to the Maker's hands enfolding.

Deep within the magic spiral
form symmetrical and chiral
floating dreams and sparks of viral
life take form in dances gyral.

Tracks of particle migration,
galaxies in slow gyration,
churn of cyclone generation,
microcosm of Creation.

Painting by Rick Mobbs of Mine Enemy Grows Older. For the prompt at readwritepoem, but it also fits prompts at Matinee Muse and Poetry Prompt.

Collection available! Knocking from Inside


Anonymous said...

very rhythmic--it would make a cool sound piece or rap r??

some wild rhymes in there too!

Anonymous said...

I agree with Artpredator. I love your adherance to the rhyme and the rhythm.

Anonymous said...

You do well with a difficult rhyme scheme. Lovely music here too.

Raven's Wing Poetry said...

I like you single end-line rhymes and descriptive language. The poem fits the artwork well too.


Anonymous said...

This poem is music by itself with its metrical and chant-like qualities. The rhyming is very well done and many of the words are beautiful to speak aloud. 'Fibonacci' and 'logarithmic' placed gently with the soft and mollified words such as 'chiral' and 'gyration'.

Wonderful write Tiel.

Anonymous said...

It is difficult to use such complex rhymes and have them truly serve the poem and carry the such depth of meaning. This is an extremely enchanting piece.

Anonymous said...

Nice! Intricate line craft.

Nunyaa said...

I may not understand all the formalities of poetry writing but I do recognise a great piece when I see it :-)

Jessica said...

Lovely! The rhyme and cadence make it sound like a Poe poem. Great take on the picture.

Anonymous said...

The rhymes work beautifully, and somehow reinforce the spiralling theme. A great partner for a beautiful painting!

Anonymous said...

awesome..i too combined prompts this week. a rick mobly painting too!

empty garden

Gemma Wiseman said...

Really loved the swirling sound effects to match the images!

Andy Sewina said...

This is great! I just love the strong 'voice' that comes through in this well written piece.

Stan Ski said...

Quite a hypnotic feel to it - I found I was drawn into it and compelled to read it through several times

Enreal said...

Beautiful. You use your words with great appreciation and meaning. Beautiful work!

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