Passage

readwritepoem's prompt this week is to use someone else's poem, with most of the important words stripped out, to create a poem of your own. Here's what I started with:

_______ all the _____ and _______,
_______ ____ obscures the ____.
____ _______ breezes _______
erase the ______ of the ___.

But still the _____ _____ of the ________
awakens ______ ___ and ____.
In the ________ _________ echo,
_________ half-__________ ______.

Ageless ________ in the _______,
_____ and _____ and _____ alone,
connected ______ ___ to _____,
a long-lost _____ is _____ _____.

And here's what I came up with, taking as few liberties as possible:

Gone all the effort and fury,
white gauze obscures the dreamer.
Tender dawn breezes carelessly
erase the prints of the walker.

But still the living heart of the sleeper
awakens partway now and then.
In the long hallway's echo,
watchers half-doze listening.

Ageless traveler in the world,
circling and sure and never alone,
connected heart-deep to God,
a long-lost wanderer is coming home.

You can read the original poem at throwshiswords.

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