If you must pluck these feathers from my wing
then let them be my tongues, to cry in pain
and utter songs that live swans never sing.
I'd have you feel the wounding, and the sting
of cold on naked flesh that will remain
if you must pluck these feathers from my wing.
A flightless swan's a shamed and broken thing
like shoreline flotsam stranded by the rain
and utters songs that live swans never sing,
abandoned by the wind. You'll see me cling
to earth, a slave in gravity's cold chain.
If you must pluck these feathers from my wing
then know these stolen plumes will only bring
you soul-death. You will walk among the slain
and utter songs that live swans never sing
until the bird and poet's suffering
unite in sad, compassionate refrain.
If you must pluck these feathers from my wing
you'll learn the songs that live swans never sing.
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Sunday, January 11, 2009
Swan Quills
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poetry,
villanelle
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13 comments:
what a beautiful villanelle, great breath, rhythm, all the way through. it's one of my favourite forms to write, though I do so rarely.
Beautiful. I find it so difficult to write in such restrictive forms and have it not come out sounding stilted or forced. You've managed this beautifully. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Brilliant. The last two line simply said it all
You excel in such forms!
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I admire that you were able to do this...it seems like it would be extremely difficult. I especially was struck by these two lines because it was so visual:
A flightless swan's a shamed and broken thing
like shoreline flotsam stranded by the rain
Beautiful read...thank you for sharing!
Every once in a while, like in this poem, you out do yourself. Excellent subject matter, imagery, and form.
Delightful and melancholy, too. A wonderful read...
this reminds me of animal cruelty!
i like these lines:
then know these stolen plumes will only bring
you soul-death. You will walk among the slain
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one can never go unscathed with ones actions. there are always consequences!
Beautiful song! I sang it straight off right through, love the refrain and the way this form works.
Ditto!
You know how much I admire your skill!
Also ditto re: beautiful song.
Love this line:
"a slave in gravity's cold chain"
beautiful...
nicely done villanelle, haunting, beautiful, skillful
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